I enjoy the piece, but it seems kind of unbalanced. Most of the image's dynamics are in the strong vertical of the glowing figure and the really strong diagonal below. It seems like the open space above the figures just hangs somewhat awkwardly.
It might be different with more content, or perhaps a different cropping. One of my impulses would be to pull in the right side, but you can't as is with the heavy floating figure... Could he have fit somewhere else?
oh my, your quantum front side bus has had a lot of burgers.....
I like it
Maybe just one way to push it further - the contrasts of the characters vary greatly and while it's good for focus going to the lass on her knee, I'm a stickler for consistency of shadow depth. It's probably just because I can't help but stick to the laws of physics when it comes to lighting. I'd have increased the contrast of the rim lighting on the foreground couple and deepened the background shadow, and increased the depth of shadow across the floor in the right side of the image.
Love how the white apparition stands out shining in the darkness and the big fat floaty dude next to her. I like the way the character knelt before them looks much more "mortal" and ordinary. I also like the two characters in the foreground who look to me like they have their own plans for the visitor. Dig the circuit board background which makes me think they are all digital creations though they may not know it.
I would have preferred the figure on the lower right (with the cool helmet) to be facing forward (just the body, head is okay)... this figure's (body language) attention toward his companion is selfishly detracting to the focus of the composition. Just like any guy at a bar ignoring his friends while talking to a babe out of his league.
The repeating figure is an interesting idea. Reinforce it with a stronger perspective distortion, the right one is not big enough and the left one is too big. Perhaps some linear elements can add to this effect.
Overall, the lighting is quite dark. The sepia tones seem quite dirty on the figures... everything being toned down could be quite useful to contrast with a bright and pure ghost like figure. She needs a bit of color dodging to brighten her up.
I think the circuitry, simply colored copper with active pulses of light, would be a nice bonus.
Try further contrasting by adding a linear gradient at a slight angle to reinforce that perspective I mentioned earlier. Make it feel like a massive wall in the background, so distant that it feels like the interior of a Dyson Sphere.
great critique! sorry that it took me so long to respond. i have so many comments that the ones i want to write a full paragraph in reply get set aside til i have time. ... this term hasn't given me much free time. but i wanted to tell you how much i appreciated your sincere critique
The Fat guy is very Baron Harkonnen/Jabba. I like that. The angle of the circuit board in the back throws off the whole piece in my opinion. It makes it feel like they are all on an angled slope...but the picture isn't composed that way.
If a clean up pass is in the works I would create platforms that everyone is standing, perhaps held up by wires connecting to the circuit board...thus tieing everything together.
I look at this and think of a chess set: pawn takes king? Very nice indeed Love the composition on this as well as the medium (even the circuitboard background). Biggest issue here is your kneeling character, his left knee on the ground is practically placed behind his right foot (not really possible unless the right foot is perched on a step and this was a straight side-shot) -- remember to keep perspective in mind for something like this.
I relly like the hat! *wink wink* Its a nice composition and the picture is really nicely executed, however the light highlights on the two characters in the foreground don't match for light value, and they also don't appear to be comming from the same point of origin. But other than that i think its very lovely. ^_^