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In the Temple by JessicaDru In the Temple by JessicaDru
Class: Character Design
Scene with multiple character designs

You might recognize one or two of these characters from my earlier posts.
Please let me know what you think of this piece. All constructive criticism is welcome. ^_^

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Terror-and-Love Featured By Owner May 17, 2011
I have found something awesome on deviant art!

This is great.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
thank you, i am really glad you like it.
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TristanNYC Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008
very awesome!!!!! Love the lines!
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
thank you very much ^_^
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LionsDreaming Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I enjoy the piece, but it seems kind of unbalanced. Most of the image's dynamics are in the strong vertical of the glowing figure and the really strong diagonal below. It seems like the open space above the figures just hangs somewhat awkwardly.

It might be different with more content, or perhaps a different cropping. One of my impulses would be to pull in the right side, but you can't as is with the heavy floating figure... Could he have fit somewhere else?
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
i could definitely do something with the upper space. either cropping, or bringing out city elements.
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pogotribal Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2008
I have to agree strongly with LionsDreaming.

I think the best decision to be made, should you revamp this image (and still have the original file) is to actually remove some of the figure elements.

Aesthetically it's still pleasing to look at, just... disjointed, I think?
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bpelectricjojo Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008
Interesting work on the light in this one! Cool stuff.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
thank you ^_^
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MarkGreenmantle Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Professional Photographer
oh my, your quantum front side bus has had a lot of burgers.....

I like it =)

Maybe just one way to push it further - the contrasts of the characters vary greatly and while it's good for focus going to the lass on her knee, I'm a stickler for consistency of shadow depth. It's probably just because I can't help but stick to the laws of physics when it comes to lighting. I'd have increased the contrast of the rim lighting on the foreground couple and deepened the background shadow, and increased the depth of shadow across the floor in the right side of the image.

I love watching how your artwork is developing. :nod: :glomp:
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
good eye. i can do something with those shadows.
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MarkGreenmantle Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Photographer
keen to see updates! :hug:
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aureoboros Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
this page can become a frame of a beautiful comic book ... no?
good realization!
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
if i only had the stamina to draw a comic.
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aureoboros Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
excuse me, but what does it means "stamina"?









when do you come to Italy?
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tazoftazmania Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2008
Love how the white apparition stands out shining in the darkness and the big fat floaty dude next to her. I like the way the character knelt before them looks much more "mortal" and ordinary.
I also like the two characters in the foreground who look to me like they have their own plans for the visitor.
Dig the circuit board background which makes me think they are all digital creations though they may not know it.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
it's a digital world, and everyone except the person kneeling are programs of some sort. i am glad you took the time to check this piece out
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kimo9909 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2008   Interface Designer
Awesome!
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
thank you
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kimo9909 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2008   Interface Designer
No problemo beautiful! :)
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wynnter89 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2008
looks amazing, such a good imagination !
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
^_^ thank you
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DojiMaidori Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008
At first glance, I see a printed circuit board watermark, Jabba the Hutt in human form, and Raiden with boobs and cobwebs.

As lighting goes, I'm not sure why I can see the face of the figure in the middle right. I would expect all but his back left to be in shadow.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
yay jabba! ^_^
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DojiMaidori Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
No response about the lightning? :)
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longhairedartist Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008
I would have preferred the figure on the lower right (with the cool helmet) to be facing forward (just the body, head is okay)... this figure's (body language) attention toward his companion is selfishly detracting to the focus of the composition. Just like any guy at a bar ignoring his friends while talking to a babe out of his league.

The repeating figure is an interesting idea. Reinforce it with a stronger perspective distortion, the right one is not big enough and the left one is too big. Perhaps some linear elements can add to this effect.

Overall, the lighting is quite dark. The sepia tones seem quite dirty on the figures... everything being toned down could be quite useful to contrast with a bright and pure ghost like figure. She needs a bit of color dodging to brighten her up.

I think the circuitry, simply colored copper with active pulses of light, would be a nice bonus.

Try further contrasting by adding a linear gradient at a slight angle to reinforce that perspective I mentioned earlier. Make it feel like a massive wall in the background, so distant that it feels like the interior of a Dyson Sphere.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
great critique! sorry that it took me so long to respond. i have so many comments that the ones i want to write a full paragraph in reply get set aside til i have time. ... this term hasn't given me much free time.
but i wanted to tell you how much i appreciated your sincere critique
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jmasker Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008
The Fat guy is very Baron Harkonnen/Jabba. I like that.
The angle of the circuit board in the back throws off the whole piece in my opinion.
It makes it feel like they are all on an angled slope...but the picture isn't composed that way.

If a clean up pass is in the works I would create platforms that everyone is standing, perhaps held up by wires connecting to the circuit board...thus tieing everything together.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
very baron harkonnen ^_^
i might do something else with the background now that you mention it.
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jmasker Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008
I forgot to mention that I love it!
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
^_^
thank youuu
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jmasker Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
Your welcome!
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Mechant-Loup Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008
I couldn't begin to give you critique, as anything I said would be severely misplaced hypocrisy.

But I do love the uneasy "Stranger in a strange land" feeling this gives. You definitely took me to another world, which is not something my mind allows lightly :)
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
i am glad you like this alternate world. i am happy you like it ^_^
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Sketchbomb Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008  Professional Filmographer
Ooo... I like the elegant white figure.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
thank you kindly, she's my fav design out of this class
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wytherwing Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008
:D awesome pic!
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
thank you
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wytherwing Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
you're most welcome. :)
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Ismaels-Legacy Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Really nice, but it's hard to tell where the wall meets the floor....
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
yeah, i can agree with you there
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Bensaret Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
I look at this and think of a chess set: pawn takes king? Very nice indeed :)
Love the composition on this as well as the medium (even the circuitboard background). Biggest issue here is your kneeling character, his left knee on the ground is practically placed behind his right foot (not really possible unless the right foot is perched on a step and this was a straight side-shot) -- remember to keep perspective in mind for something like this.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
^_^
i see what you mean about the kneeling character. i'll see what i can do
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Shwinn Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I relly like the hat! *wink wink* Its a nice composition and the picture is really nicely executed, however the light highlights on the two characters in the foreground don't match for light value, and they also don't appear to be comming from the same point of origin. But other than that i think its very lovely. ^_^
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
i love that style of hat too. you see how happy i am to own one ^_~
and i'm gonna re-evaluate all the light stuff. i wan to do it right!
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Shwinn Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
lol! sounds awesome. ^_^
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Shadowgrail Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
Beautiful work on the background.. the texture and details are amazing !
love the color palette as well as your over-all lay-out for the page. great work !
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
thank you very much ^_^
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rozial1610-alive-aga Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2008
I love the computer chip background and the helmet on the person in the front. I think the Larger man could use a little more detail but overall i realy enjoy it.
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JessicaDru Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
*nods* thank you. and yeah, he needs a bit more light
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